A-Z Sample Essay Analysis: ALFI and his Plight to State the Obvious

Well, I decided to write about the first essay because in somewhat of a way, it does tend to relate to mine in topic; however, I feel its a good example of what not to do in writing. If there is one thing that stands out to me in this essay, it is that of how vague it is. I can see where the writer is trying to head in ho Austen influences the reader through the gossip of her dialogue to formulate opinions on the novel, but it never actually goes into depth of what purpose does she use this for other then that of "formulating opinions." This week introduction and thesis thus sets up a weak essay. As we get into the main bulk of the essay, there is this continuous sense of vagueness to the point where it seems the writer was unsure of what he or she wanted to actually write about. The topic seems so obvious and apparent that the thesis its self could be supported with any quote form the novel. It is this style that tends to make reading this essay a bore, not only from its lack of in depth analysis, but the idea going through the readers head of. " well ya, she obviously did write the book so the reader would have an opinion." The only way this essay can be improved is for the writer to find something deeper than the concept of ideas forming opinions. Only then will the essay carry its true meaning of arguing a valid point.